25. Game over. Or was it?

Game over. Or was it?

Humbert asked for a moment to catch his breath. Usually he beat Cedric easily at squash. But this time his timing was off. Way off. This could become the biggest defeat he ever suffered. But Humbert wasn’t going to make this a walkover. He returned to the service box and gave Cedric a nod. Game on. Let’s make this respectable.

An elegant drop-shot that barely cleared the red line made it 10-2 and he was lucky his opponent had a wayward serve thereafter. The belief that he could really pull off the upset still hadn’t gelled after the scores read 10-5, though three hard-fought points later Humbert re-found his self-belief.

You see, Cedric was shaking as a leaf now, cursing everything from his cheap racket to the uneven squash court floor. Humbert started to enjoy his suffering. He had him on the ropes. Just two more points and the game was really afoot.

10-9 was a doozy as Humbert wrong-footed his opponent who was now incessantly shaking his head in disbelief. This was to be the comeback of all comebacks, surely? Humbert’s power-serve secured 10 all and Cedric did not even get his racket on the ball on the next point.

Humbert had never been one not to boast when the chance arose so he throw Cedric a smug remark just before serving the final point of this remarkable comeback.

Hey, Humbert, quit dreaming!

He looked up. Cedric was standing in the serve box, ready to pummel the ball against the wall.

10-1, Cedric stated again. Game over.

Or is it, sneered Humbert as he took the position.



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3 thoughts on “25. Game over. Or was it?

  1. Julian Neuer says:

    Curious how the dynamics of this piece resembles that of a 3-part comic strip: reality, day-dreaming, back to reality, everything so vivid with details.

    There must be interesting parallels to be explored between comic strips and flash fiction. Words and images are different means, to be sure, but many of the intended effects are the same.

    • There’s definitely a parallel there, Julian. I think since in both cases you have a very limited amount of words/images to tell your story you almost immediately hark back to a classic 3-part story structure. And as working out an elaborate plot would be moot, you’re relying on vivid visuals to draw in the reader. Which is what draws me to both the comic strip and flash fiction actually.

  2. I love it. It pulled me in and I was so certain Humbert was going to win……

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