204. Who’s going to miss him?

Who’s going to miss him?

That was the last thought that raced through  Ned’s head before aiming his shotgun at the burglar’s chest and pulling the trigger. The burglar was unarmed and the silent alarm assured the police would be here in minutes. But Ned shot him anyway. His privacy had been invaded. There had to be a price to pay.

 

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16 thoughts on “204. Who’s going to miss him?

  1. storyzetu says:

    Oh man! The conscience never shuts up does it?! Love this story

  2. Very well done. Yes did the right thing, but the opening line tells the whole story, “who’s going to miss him?” He should not have pulled the trigger with such an empathic thought.

  3. Even when actions appear justified, the consequences can be brutal and lifelong. Very well told!

  4. Kate Loveton says:

    I liked this ever so much! Crisp, clear writing, and a good hook at the end. Well done!

  5. sandraconner says:

    What a powerful study in psychology! Good writing.

  6. vickylmccabe says:

    Great story, and thanks for the follow!

  7. atrm61 says:

    Great story with shades of Poe-reminded me of his “The tell-tale heart” 🙂

  8. JohnRH says:

    Culling the herd. Ned must be a politician. ‘It was for the greater good.’

  9. Jennifer Taylor says:

    Great opening line and a nice twist in the tail. I really enjoyed it.

  10. Conscience. That’s what drives this mankind. That’s how it should be. Had never read a story before with such a powerful impact.

  11. VictoriaJoDean says:

    Good job. You pulled us along and then showing the truth in the very last line. Nice writing.

  12. good little piece. I also loved the last line

  13. A.D. Everard says:

    I like it. Hidden remorse. Hidden depth. That last line brings in a whole new and unexpected layer, giving the reader a glimpse of the whole. Beautifully done.

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